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"The Butchman" by JackieT

A short short story I wrote a few years back, set in suburban Queensland (Australia) in the late 1960s.The Butchman(c) JackieT, 2001 Four-year-old Billy loved going shopping. He sat patiently on the...

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dont worry about that. a writer doesn't have so much distance from his story to notice those mistakes."There is just one power to keep you from going your way - you." Anonymous

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You hit the nail on the head, Anni - when I think of the "Butchman", I still think Billy!Jackie

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then let me give an advice - go for Billy. "There is just one power to keep you from going your way - you." Anonymous

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Cool Anni - will just go right back and edit all the Sams back to Billy Could you be a sweetheart and re-proofread the original short short to see that in my 'grey moment' I haven't missed one...

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I did reproofread and no grey moments except I was having a blonde moment I am laughing here too laughs all around the world. the best cure ever love and hugsanni"There is just one power to keep you...

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Thanks, Anni - I'm If I ever get it published, I'll include in the Acknowledgment:Quote:Many thanks to Anni Scribble for her perceptive eye, invaluable advice, and faultless proof-reading.Jackie

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that would be cool did you actually try to get any of your fictional stories published? you hould. this one is awesome "There is just one power to keep you from going your way - you." Anonymous

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Aaaaw thank you, Anni - will add "encouragement" to the Acknowledgment! No, have not yet got the courage to actually submit any of my short stories for publication - but I do love writing them Jackie

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then at least post them here for us (especially me) to read "There is just one power to keep you from going your way - you." Anonymous

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Ok, Anni - just for you, I will. Next short story I post will be "The Shine - first paragraph here, just to get your taste buds in tune ....The Shine (c) Jackie T, 2001&nbsp &nbsp &nbsp...

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that ickle bit of the story sounds very promising. very mean of you to leave me with that! "There is just one power to keep you from going your way - you." Anonymous

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Anni"Nah, don't think so - I'm still trying to grow it long, Miss Piggy," Donna said as she pushed her car-polish stained, stubby fingers through her fine, mousy-brown hair. "The hair colour finished...

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I liked the descriptive of this part. you could really imagine it with all the colours and adjectives and so on. more more more............... MORE!"There is just one power to keep you from going your...

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Anni - ok, next excerpt:"Yeah, well, I've got the tail-end of that spray-in lightener my sister gave me. Haven't tried it yet, but it's supposed to work faster if you sit in the sun. Or you can use a...

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feed me in little bits huh? but I am still to figure out where you are going to. the characters now became clearer and it is just too funny when Janey is hurrying to get to Jase and almost burns Donna...

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Anni - I've got three endings for this short story, so while I serving it up to you in dribs and drabs gives me time to decide which one I'll go for.--------------------"Nah, Coke's all gone," replied...

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hm, family problems I suppose... not everything as good as it first seems. there is to come some trouble. and why do you try to decide? give me all three endings and I can tell you then which I liked...

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here's more as you requested, Anni ---------------"Give me some cottonwool, would you Janey? I look like I've got a helmet on with all this dye around my face!" Donna wiped away the excess dye with...

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you are so mean leaving me there (and I so mean letting you wait on a reply for ages. sorry I didnt mean to) lets see how this goes on. the tension is building up to some point and I have still no...

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